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Munkey \| 09/11/2007 @213 \| edit post

ok it's a finish piece but I would like to know something I need to improve on

Re: invader
plasticine \| 09/11/2007 @343 \| edit post

Considering my level of expertise the only thing I can tell you to improve is the composition.

Composition is a very important thing to take care of in order to create a good illustration. You can check out Daykan's tutorial here:

Approach to the Artistic Illustration

I don’t think I can express it better myself, so check out composition I and II and try to apply these principles to your drawings. The thing here is that almost all the right side of the drawing has nothing on it but black and red, it’s like cutting the drawing in two, and it almost feels like the right side is unnecessary.

It is an action sceen but because of the size of the action sceen in the whole it feels numb. Unless the feeling of numb action in an empty and dark universe was your aim, you should defenately work on the composition.

I Hope that helps.

[Message edited on 09/11 @344]

Re: invader
Madster \| 09/11/2007 @825 \| edit post

The background is too blah, yet too dominant in this piece, with the overuse of too much black compounding the issue.

Where is this scene taking place? At present, it looks to be happening in an underwater cave. There is no atmosphere nor space for the scene to be playing out. Not much in the way of water, either, for that matter, but the jet flames behind the smaller vehicles are so soft, they look more like water trails (for some off-world fantasy water that is red, rather than blue)...

You need to plan out what your environment is for a composition such as this, and then paint enough light and detail, so that the viewer can look at it, and see what you intend.

At present, this piece doesn't convey a whole lot of anything, and does so in an inconsistent manner, with your light source(s) not clearly established, your shadows too vague and ill defined, and your focal point(s) poorly emphasized.

Perhaps you could explain more about this piece and what is supposed to be going on, so we can give you better suggestions on how to improve it.

~M

Re: invader
Daykan \| 09/11/2007 @835 \| edit post

Tere and Maddy say all

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